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Title: Grotesque - unfinished...seeking advice, I'm stuck :(
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Artist: Din
Genre: Electronica: Other
Reviewed by: Dreambliss on November 26, 2007 (All reviews by Dreambliss)

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Dreambliss responded: I'm so happy to of been able to provide constructive feedback :)

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1Overall Description
This is a dark sounding industrial tune with slow progression throughout the song. The simple yet catchy melody is perfect and the rhythm is excellent. Overall the song is fantastic but needs a proper ending - hence "unfinished seeking advice :)" and does have some minor issues.

I feel that the song is missing a driving low end distortion guitar. Slowly fade it in starting at around 0:58 to blend with the song and play at full volume when the bass line starts at 1:06-1:07. The drums seem a bit too distorted, and I can hear some crackling as a result.

I like the change of melody at 3:03-3:04. What I suggest for an ending is bring back the melody that's played at around 1:56-1:57 at 4:01-4:02 by ending the 3:03 melody and cutting back over to the melody at 1:56-1:57. Then play out that melody for another 35ish seconds and drop the drums and play out the guitar and background synth for another measure ending the song on the high note of the guitar. I think the rest of the song is fine the way it is.

Of course this is just my suggestion/opinion and I am not the slightest bit a pro, but I hope this helps guide you to where you'd like to take this song to. I give this a four because I do believe this song has potential but does have some minor issues and also because it's unfinished. I am sure it will warrant a five when it's complete :)
 
Comments
Nov 28 2007 11:35 pm
by TwiTerror replying to Din
I was agreeing with you (:



Nov 28 2007 9:29 pm
by Din replying to TwiTerror
Isn't that what I said? ;)



Nov 26 2007 11:17 pm
by TwiTerror replying to Din
I think this is a good review in the format its in. (:



Nov 26 2007 6:05 pm
by Din replying to Dreambliss
That's what comments are for ;) I loved the review though, and not for any kind of genre expertise or lack of it. You offered ideas on how you might fix things. And even if I don't use some or any of those ideas, now I'm inspired to try something else out. That's exactly what a review should be; a creative nudge. Thanks bunches :D



Nov 26 2007 12:26 pm
by Dreambliss
I may not be the best person to review this for my lack of knowledge of industrial, but I hope this has helped in some way. I apologize for my 2 AM "Cool music" vague comment before, man was I out of it and barely remember anything past midnight that night :)